Moment in time…
There is no time to lick the luscious smear off my
face, as I desperately try to grab a breath, before bobbing back under the
gloopy mess. My eyes are scrunched shut to avoid flying explosions that
splatter like paint pellets. Thick
dribbles run down my chin in camouflage design.
Chocolate boils around my flailing arms as I trying to stay afloat.
Remember - think carefully before making a wish as it
might come true!
Allana - teacher
Can you answer thee questions about my attempt at the 100 word challenge?
What changes between the paragraphs?
Who is talking?
What tense is used - past, present, future?
What similes are used?
Why are there three paragraphs?
Cool blog guys. That boy looks like he is having lots of fun in the chocolate puddle. I'd love to write a story about that picture. From Ashton
ReplyDeleteCool blog guys. That boy looks like he is having lots of fun in the chocolate puddle. I'd love to write a story about that picture. Ashton, Lake Tekapo School.
ReplyDeleteHey team, we would love to come and visit your blog. Try adding tour URL at the bottom of a comment so people can visit you too.
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