Thursday, 18 April 2013

100 word challenge






At school there was a test and I thought it would be boring, until my brother announced that you could win a trip to the moon.  I was so excited that I got all the answers right. 

The next day I went to the moon with my dad. But when I got there it had melted and we slid into slippery gooey middle.  Dad called mum but she did not reply. 

We were stuck in the middle of the moon for two months until we dug ourselves out.  Next we built a space shuttle to get home.

Josephine

7 comments:

  1. Dear Josephine,

    I am Thomas, one of the kids from QSI International School of Sarajevo. I like how you were so imaginary of the challenge, how the moon melted, and you slid into the gooey middle. I have also done something like that before, although you have to make a story using a specific group of words, not amount. The moon though, because of its G-Forces to Earth, most likely wouldn’t melt. Speaking of school work, I am doing a blog, http://classypotatoblog.weebly.com/ that I would think you would enjoy. One last thing; does the boy look like he fell in mud in the picture? Well, hope to hear back!

    Sincerely,

    Thomas B.

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  2. This was a really good piece of writing! It was really imaginative and fun to read. If you want to see my school blog here's a link to it http://classycupcakeblog.weebly.com/

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  3. Sarah

    I love your piece of writing. Very creative!

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  4. Wow sounds like you had a good time. That was a great story and I liked the deatail

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  5. My name is Jelena and I think it was fun and if you really want to go to the moon you should get a rocket to go there!!!

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  6. Loooove it! I especially like the part where you go to the moon. Very exciting! From Selma (QSI Sarajevo, 3rd grade)

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  7. Hi Jojo
    I like how you don't tell us about every single thing you just tell us what is important
    for your story.
    I don't think you need to work on anything because it is so good.

    from chloe

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